First draft feedback

Yesterday, we presented our first draft to the rest of the class in order to receive feedback - both positives of the trailer and things that can be altered. This is what we were told:

Positives:

• The overlapping voiceovers of news reports while the newspaper articles were being presented on screen
• Good music and sound choices
• The end of thetrailer was very good and fitted the genre well - leaving questions on what happens to the main character in the narrative

Negatives:

• Some shots were too long and therefore need to be cut down
• Some of the titles were too far apart - meaning that the audience forgot what was being said
• The first shot of the radio was poor as you could tell it was a school setting

Changes we will make: 

Firstly, we need to cut some of the shots down in ordert o improve the flow and speed of the trailer as it is a typical convention of thriller genre trailers that the shots and cuts are faced paced - and the time of the trailer is currently at 1:45, and this may be a little too long for a trailer. We also then need to bring the titles closer together - for example; 'YOU - CAN'T - RUN - FOREVER'. Between each of these words there were shots of the trailer and these went on for a little too lng, meaning the audience forgot what the titles said by the time the next one came along. We also need to re-film the radio shot in order to make it look moer like it is in a home setting - as it is meant to be the main character who is listening to the radio, and we hadn't properly considered mise-en-scene when filming it the first time around. Although it wasn't mentioned by the class, it was also apparent to me that some of the titles need fades as the appear and dissapear off the screen too quickly.